The only safe place to stand
when looking at guns
is to one side.
When I look into
your eyes, I see gunbarrels,
and I am trying to discover
what it would take
to move that trigger.
If you close your eyes and someone says,
“Imagine you’re looking down a gun barrel,”
which end do you see
when you open your eyes?
I see your face. I see
wonders and dangers. I see
they may kill me,
but that there’s also a chance of resting my head
for a moment, a day, a whole
heaven of smoke and circumstance.
I have no idea what you want.
I’m not sure if I should ask you.
I only know there’s a whiff of black powder in the air.
Black powder guns hang fire far too often,
and blow up in their lovers’ arms.
You might think they’d be obsolete by now,
but there are those
who cannot let things go, and
that’s the way I feel tonight. That’s why
every time you blink, I shiver. Every time you move,
I freeze. Every time our eyes meet,
I pray for the strength to fire back.

May 16th, 2005 at 8:59 pm
Re: Hm.
Persuader?
You’ve been reading too much Raymond Chandler. 😀
May 16th, 2005 at 8:59 pm
Re: Hm.
Persuader?
You’ve been reading too much Raymond Chandler. 😀
May 16th, 2005 at 8:59 pm
Re: Hm.
Persuader?
You’ve been reading too much Raymond Chandler. 😀
May 16th, 2005 at 8:59 pm
Re: Hm.
Persuader?
You’ve been reading too much Raymond Chandler. 😀
May 16th, 2005 at 8:12 pm
Re: Hm.
Hmmm….weapon…piece…firearm…
forty-five…mortar…persuader….?
Nah. ‘Gun’ fits.
May 16th, 2005 at 8:12 pm
Re: Hm.
Hmmm….weapon…piece…firearm…
forty-five…mortar…persuader….?
Nah. ‘Gun’ fits.
May 16th, 2005 at 8:12 pm
Re: Hm.
Hmmm….weapon…piece…firearm…
forty-five…mortar…persuader….?
Nah. ‘Gun’ fits.
May 16th, 2005 at 8:12 pm
Re: Hm.
Hmmm….weapon…piece…firearm…
forty-five…mortar…persuader….?
Nah. ‘Gun’ fits.
May 13th, 2005 at 10:06 pm
Hm.
any thoughts?
May 13th, 2005 at 10:06 pm
Hm.
any thoughts?
May 13th, 2005 at 10:06 pm
Hm.
any thoughts?
May 13th, 2005 at 10:06 pm
Hm.
any thoughts?
May 13th, 2005 at 6:46 pm
Beautiful. I like the new version also.
Just a thought, is there another term besides ‘guns’ that might fit here?
In my experience, use of that term is seemingly elementary when you’re talking to someone who’s handled a weapon/piece before…but then again, your use of it here does make the metaphor very clear.
May 13th, 2005 at 6:46 pm
Beautiful. I like the new version also.
Just a thought, is there another term besides ‘guns’ that might fit here?
In my experience, use of that term is seemingly elementary when you’re talking to someone who’s handled a weapon/piece before…but then again, your use of it here does make the metaphor very clear.
May 13th, 2005 at 6:46 pm
Beautiful. I like the new version also.
Just a thought, is there another term besides ‘guns’ that might fit here?
In my experience, use of that term is seemingly elementary when you’re talking to someone who’s handled a weapon/piece before…but then again, your use of it here does make the metaphor very clear.
May 13th, 2005 at 6:46 pm
Beautiful. I like the new version also.
Just a thought, is there another term besides ‘guns’ that might fit here?
In my experience, use of that term is seemingly elementary when you’re talking to someone who’s handled a weapon/piece before…but then again, your use of it here does make the metaphor very clear.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:47 am
Eh. Never mind. I like this one better — my editing gene got away from me.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:47 am
Eh. Never mind. I like this one better — my editing gene got away from me.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:47 am
Eh. Never mind. I like this one better — my editing gene got away from me.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:47 am
Eh. Never mind. I like this one better — my editing gene got away from me.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:40 am
Try the new version. Interested in your take on it.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:40 am
Try the new version. Interested in your take on it.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:40 am
Try the new version. Interested in your take on it.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:40 am
Try the new version. Interested in your take on it.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:28 am
That’s more like it. The raw nerve.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:28 am
That’s more like it. The raw nerve.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:28 am
That’s more like it. The raw nerve.
May 13th, 2005 at 2:28 am
That’s more like it. The raw nerve.
May 13th, 2005 at 1:54 am
Try that.
May 13th, 2005 at 1:54 am
Try that.
May 13th, 2005 at 1:54 am
Try that.
May 13th, 2005 at 1:54 am
Try that.
May 12th, 2005 at 10:23 pm
Erm, not much change. Could you make the face or the firing squad the subject?
May 12th, 2005 at 10:23 pm
Erm, not much change. Could you make the face or the firing squad the subject?
May 12th, 2005 at 10:23 pm
Erm, not much change. Could you make the face or the firing squad the subject?
May 12th, 2005 at 10:23 pm
Erm, not much change. Could you make the face or the firing squad the subject?
May 12th, 2005 at 7:32 pm
Re: Mmhm.
Good call out.
Better?
May 12th, 2005 at 7:32 pm
Re: Mmhm.
Good call out.
Better?
May 12th, 2005 at 7:32 pm
Re: Mmhm.
Good call out.
Better?
May 12th, 2005 at 7:32 pm
Re: Mmhm.
Good call out.
Better?
May 12th, 2005 at 6:25 pm
Mmhm.
Great movement towards the end.
Startling central metaphor.
I’d make “I am resigned” more dynamic.
May 12th, 2005 at 6:25 pm
Mmhm.
Great movement towards the end.
Startling central metaphor.
I’d make “I am resigned” more dynamic.
May 12th, 2005 at 6:25 pm
Mmhm.
Great movement towards the end.
Startling central metaphor.
I’d make “I am resigned” more dynamic.
May 12th, 2005 at 6:25 pm
Mmhm.
Great movement towards the end.
Startling central metaphor.
I’d make “I am resigned” more dynamic.