sometimes the bed
is bigger than I can stand
I’ve spilled a cup of stains
a day over these sheets
I want to ask a question of the empty room
but it talks so loudly I can’t get a word in
so instead I’ve chewed the pillows
until I’m dried spitless and mute
I wake up at all hours with the same thought each time —
dream is one letter away from dread
write it all down, the therapist says
but even then I can’t keep it down
the bed gets bigger every day as if
oak could still grow after death
when I thought nothing could
Dark Matter 
August 12th, 2004 at 2:13 pm
Re: mmmmmmmm
Hiya, and thanks.
Name’s Tony Brown, from Massachusetts. I’ve got a bunch of stuff posted here in this journal, if you go back through.
August 12th, 2004 at 2:13 pm
Re: mmmmmmmm
Hiya, and thanks.
Name’s Tony Brown, from Massachusetts. I’ve got a bunch of stuff posted here in this journal, if you go back through.
August 12th, 2004 at 2:13 pm
Re: mmmmmmmm
Hiya, and thanks.
Name’s Tony Brown, from Massachusetts. I’ve got a bunch of stuff posted here in this journal, if you go back through.
August 12th, 2004 at 2:13 pm
Re: mmmmmmmm
Hiya, and thanks.
Name’s Tony Brown, from Massachusetts. I’ve got a bunch of stuff posted here in this journal, if you go back through.
August 12th, 2004 at 2:13 pm
Re: mmmmmmmm
Hiya, and thanks.
Name’s Tony Brown, from Massachusetts. I’ve got a bunch of stuff posted here in this journal, if you go back through.
August 12th, 2004 at 2:13 pm
Re: mmmmmmmm
Hiya, and thanks.
Name’s Tony Brown, from Massachusetts. I’ve got a bunch of stuff posted here in this journal, if you go back through.
August 12th, 2004 at 10:12 am
mmmmmmmm
Hey, I’ve just signed on this thingy and somehow found your poem. what a wonderful moment you’ve given me with your words. it’s really really great. the only thing, I don’t like the ‘dream is one letter…’ line at the end. I really think it fits better in the middle. I like the concept of the other ending line with, but it’s not right either…still, thank you. do you have other stuff I could read? who are ye?
August 12th, 2004 at 10:12 am
mmmmmmmm
Hey, I’ve just signed on this thingy and somehow found your poem. what a wonderful moment you’ve given me with your words. it’s really really great. the only thing, I don’t like the ‘dream is one letter…’ line at the end. I really think it fits better in the middle. I like the concept of the other ending line with, but it’s not right either…still, thank you. do you have other stuff I could read? who are ye?
August 12th, 2004 at 10:12 am
mmmmmmmm
Hey, I’ve just signed on this thingy and somehow found your poem. what a wonderful moment you’ve given me with your words. it’s really really great. the only thing, I don’t like the ‘dream is one letter…’ line at the end. I really think it fits better in the middle. I like the concept of the other ending line with, but it’s not right either…still, thank you. do you have other stuff I could read? who are ye?
August 12th, 2004 at 10:12 am
mmmmmmmm
Hey, I’ve just signed on this thingy and somehow found your poem. what a wonderful moment you’ve given me with your words. it’s really really great. the only thing, I don’t like the ‘dream is one letter…’ line at the end. I really think it fits better in the middle. I like the concept of the other ending line with, but it’s not right either…still, thank you. do you have other stuff I could read? who are ye?
August 12th, 2004 at 10:12 am
mmmmmmmm
Hey, I’ve just signed on this thingy and somehow found your poem. what a wonderful moment you’ve given me with your words. it’s really really great. the only thing, I don’t like the ‘dream is one letter…’ line at the end. I really think it fits better in the middle. I like the concept of the other ending line with, but it’s not right either…still, thank you. do you have other stuff I could read? who are ye?
August 12th, 2004 at 10:12 am
mmmmmmmm
Hey, I’ve just signed on this thingy and somehow found your poem. what a wonderful moment you’ve given me with your words. it’s really really great. the only thing, I don’t like the ‘dream is one letter…’ line at the end. I really think it fits better in the middle. I like the concept of the other ending line with, but it’s not right either…still, thank you. do you have other stuff I could read? who are ye?
August 12th, 2004 at 7:43 am
that last line
I like it. Might drop the “when” though, dunno, if you just pull it it’s not the same poem.
“dream is one letter away from dread”
So, so, good.
August 12th, 2004 at 7:43 am
that last line
I like it. Might drop the “when” though, dunno, if you just pull it it’s not the same poem.
“dream is one letter away from dread”
So, so, good.
August 12th, 2004 at 7:43 am
that last line
I like it. Might drop the “when” though, dunno, if you just pull it it’s not the same poem.
“dream is one letter away from dread”
So, so, good.
August 12th, 2004 at 7:43 am
that last line
I like it. Might drop the “when” though, dunno, if you just pull it it’s not the same poem.
“dream is one letter away from dread”
So, so, good.
August 12th, 2004 at 7:43 am
that last line
I like it. Might drop the “when” though, dunno, if you just pull it it’s not the same poem.
“dream is one letter away from dread”
So, so, good.
August 12th, 2004 at 7:43 am
that last line
I like it. Might drop the “when” though, dunno, if you just pull it it’s not the same poem.
“dream is one letter away from dread”
So, so, good.
August 12th, 2004 at 7:01 am
beautiful work, sir.
i agree with the choir on that last line, it’s nailed on.
the “can’t keep it down” couplet is the most interesting splinter-in-my-mind piece of this for me, the play on nausea working against the idea that fixing something in words will cure it, and the lines enhance my sense of the speaker–you–as someone who sees how fluid reality is, how it resists being pinned down, and it’s also–while dark–a little funny in its wordplay, and it left-turn sets up the next image.
glad you’re writing/”hope you’re keeping some kind of record” 😉
August 12th, 2004 at 7:01 am
beautiful work, sir.
i agree with the choir on that last line, it’s nailed on.
the “can’t keep it down” couplet is the most interesting splinter-in-my-mind piece of this for me, the play on nausea working against the idea that fixing something in words will cure it, and the lines enhance my sense of the speaker–you–as someone who sees how fluid reality is, how it resists being pinned down, and it’s also–while dark–a little funny in its wordplay, and it left-turn sets up the next image.
glad you’re writing/”hope you’re keeping some kind of record” 😉
August 12th, 2004 at 7:01 am
beautiful work, sir.
i agree with the choir on that last line, it’s nailed on.
the “can’t keep it down” couplet is the most interesting splinter-in-my-mind piece of this for me, the play on nausea working against the idea that fixing something in words will cure it, and the lines enhance my sense of the speaker–you–as someone who sees how fluid reality is, how it resists being pinned down, and it’s also–while dark–a little funny in its wordplay, and it left-turn sets up the next image.
glad you’re writing/”hope you’re keeping some kind of record” 😉
August 12th, 2004 at 7:01 am
beautiful work, sir.
i agree with the choir on that last line, it’s nailed on.
the “can’t keep it down” couplet is the most interesting splinter-in-my-mind piece of this for me, the play on nausea working against the idea that fixing something in words will cure it, and the lines enhance my sense of the speaker–you–as someone who sees how fluid reality is, how it resists being pinned down, and it’s also–while dark–a little funny in its wordplay, and it left-turn sets up the next image.
glad you’re writing/”hope you’re keeping some kind of record” 😉
August 12th, 2004 at 7:01 am
beautiful work, sir.
i agree with the choir on that last line, it’s nailed on.
the “can’t keep it down” couplet is the most interesting splinter-in-my-mind piece of this for me, the play on nausea working against the idea that fixing something in words will cure it, and the lines enhance my sense of the speaker–you–as someone who sees how fluid reality is, how it resists being pinned down, and it’s also–while dark–a little funny in its wordplay, and it left-turn sets up the next image.
glad you’re writing/”hope you’re keeping some kind of record” 😉
August 12th, 2004 at 7:01 am
beautiful work, sir.
i agree with the choir on that last line, it’s nailed on.
the “can’t keep it down” couplet is the most interesting splinter-in-my-mind piece of this for me, the play on nausea working against the idea that fixing something in words will cure it, and the lines enhance my sense of the speaker–you–as someone who sees how fluid reality is, how it resists being pinned down, and it’s also–while dark–a little funny in its wordplay, and it left-turn sets up the next image.
glad you’re writing/”hope you’re keeping some kind of record” 😉
August 12th, 2004 at 6:24 am
Ditto.
I agree with euqort; “I’ve spilled a cup of stains” is so very striking. I also really like “as if/oak could still grow after death.” I think the poem could easily end with that line.
August 12th, 2004 at 6:24 am
Ditto.
I agree with euqort; “I’ve spilled a cup of stains” is so very striking. I also really like “as if/oak could still grow after death.” I think the poem could easily end with that line.
August 12th, 2004 at 6:24 am
Ditto.
I agree with euqort; “I’ve spilled a cup of stains” is so very striking. I also really like “as if/oak could still grow after death.” I think the poem could easily end with that line.
August 12th, 2004 at 6:24 am
Ditto.
I agree with euqort; “I’ve spilled a cup of stains” is so very striking. I also really like “as if/oak could still grow after death.” I think the poem could easily end with that line.
August 12th, 2004 at 6:24 am
Ditto.
I agree with euqort; “I’ve spilled a cup of stains” is so very striking. I also really like “as if/oak could still grow after death.” I think the poem could easily end with that line.
August 12th, 2004 at 6:24 am
Ditto.
I agree with euqort; “I’ve spilled a cup of stains” is so very striking. I also really like “as if/oak could still grow after death.” I think the poem could easily end with that line.
August 12th, 2004 at 4:12 am
Amazing. I love this.
Here’s the line that leaped out at me and will stay like song lyrics do I’ve spilled a cup of stains
You are beautiful.
besitos
T.
August 12th, 2004 at 4:12 am
Amazing. I love this.
Here’s the line that leaped out at me and will stay like song lyrics do I’ve spilled a cup of stains
You are beautiful.
besitos
T.
August 12th, 2004 at 4:12 am
Amazing. I love this.
Here’s the line that leaped out at me and will stay like song lyrics do I’ve spilled a cup of stains
You are beautiful.
besitos
T.
August 12th, 2004 at 4:12 am
Amazing. I love this.
Here’s the line that leaped out at me and will stay like song lyrics do I’ve spilled a cup of stains
You are beautiful.
besitos
T.
August 12th, 2004 at 4:12 am
Amazing. I love this.
Here’s the line that leaped out at me and will stay like song lyrics do I’ve spilled a cup of stains
You are beautiful.
besitos
T.
August 12th, 2004 at 4:12 am
Amazing. I love this.
Here’s the line that leaped out at me and will stay like song lyrics do I’ve spilled a cup of stains
You are beautiful.
besitos
T.
August 12th, 2004 at 1:39 am
I don’t have much to add side from “Thank you.” This poem is beautiful.
August 12th, 2004 at 1:39 am
I don’t have much to add side from “Thank you.” This poem is beautiful.
August 12th, 2004 at 1:39 am
I don’t have much to add side from “Thank you.” This poem is beautiful.
August 12th, 2004 at 1:39 am
I don’t have much to add side from “Thank you.” This poem is beautiful.
August 12th, 2004 at 1:39 am
I don’t have much to add side from “Thank you.” This poem is beautiful.
August 12th, 2004 at 1:39 am
I don’t have much to add side from “Thank you.” This poem is beautiful.
August 11th, 2004 at 11:13 pm
Yeah, nix the last line. The rest is beautiful. What if the lines themselves stretched out towards the end?
Mel
August 11th, 2004 at 11:13 pm
Yeah, nix the last line. The rest is beautiful. What if the lines themselves stretched out towards the end?
Mel
August 11th, 2004 at 11:13 pm
Yeah, nix the last line. The rest is beautiful. What if the lines themselves stretched out towards the end?
Mel
August 11th, 2004 at 11:13 pm
Yeah, nix the last line. The rest is beautiful. What if the lines themselves stretched out towards the end?
Mel
August 11th, 2004 at 11:13 pm
Yeah, nix the last line. The rest is beautiful. What if the lines themselves stretched out towards the end?
Mel
August 11th, 2004 at 11:13 pm
Yeah, nix the last line. The rest is beautiful. What if the lines themselves stretched out towards the end?
Mel
August 11th, 2004 at 9:30 pm
the opening line is a puller for me – echoes of Joni Mitchell. i second Dawn, dream is one letter away from dread is perfect perfect perfect. the soft end as well, is good to the ear, has the same stuff of the best childrens’ stories – the gentle abstraction that says to the listener, “now it’s time to go to bed, Dear.”
i don’t know that it really needs much editing, T.
August 11th, 2004 at 9:30 pm
the opening line is a puller for me – echoes of Joni Mitchell. i second Dawn, dream is one letter away from dread is perfect perfect perfect. the soft end as well, is good to the ear, has the same stuff of the best childrens’ stories – the gentle abstraction that says to the listener, “now it’s time to go to bed, Dear.”
i don’t know that it really needs much editing, T.
August 11th, 2004 at 9:30 pm
the opening line is a puller for me – echoes of Joni Mitchell. i second Dawn, dream is one letter away from dread is perfect perfect perfect. the soft end as well, is good to the ear, has the same stuff of the best childrens’ stories – the gentle abstraction that says to the listener, “now it’s time to go to bed, Dear.”
i don’t know that it really needs much editing, T.
August 11th, 2004 at 9:30 pm
the opening line is a puller for me – echoes of Joni Mitchell. i second Dawn, dream is one letter away from dread is perfect perfect perfect. the soft end as well, is good to the ear, has the same stuff of the best childrens’ stories – the gentle abstraction that says to the listener, “now it’s time to go to bed, Dear.”
i don’t know that it really needs much editing, T.
August 11th, 2004 at 9:30 pm
the opening line is a puller for me – echoes of Joni Mitchell. i second Dawn, dream is one letter away from dread is perfect perfect perfect. the soft end as well, is good to the ear, has the same stuff of the best childrens’ stories – the gentle abstraction that says to the listener, “now it’s time to go to bed, Dear.”
i don’t know that it really needs much editing, T.
August 11th, 2004 at 9:30 pm
the opening line is a puller for me – echoes of Joni Mitchell. i second Dawn, dream is one letter away from dread is perfect perfect perfect. the soft end as well, is good to the ear, has the same stuff of the best childrens’ stories – the gentle abstraction that says to the listener, “now it’s time to go to bed, Dear.”
i don’t know that it really needs much editing, T.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:58 pm
Yup. Agreed. Don’t wanna rush it.
I wrote this just now in the LJ post field, so it’s really new.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:58 pm
Yup. Agreed. Don’t wanna rush it.
I wrote this just now in the LJ post field, so it’s really new.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:58 pm
Yup. Agreed. Don’t wanna rush it.
I wrote this just now in the LJ post field, so it’s really new.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:58 pm
Yup. Agreed. Don’t wanna rush it.
I wrote this just now in the LJ post field, so it’s really new.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:58 pm
Yup. Agreed. Don’t wanna rush it.
I wrote this just now in the LJ post field, so it’s really new.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:58 pm
Yup. Agreed. Don’t wanna rush it.
I wrote this just now in the LJ post field, so it’s really new.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:53 pm
yes, it’s potentially cheezy (though it is suggested by the oak). This is a sort of line that sometimes takes long time to develop, I think.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:53 pm
yes, it’s potentially cheezy (though it is suggested by the oak). This is a sort of line that sometimes takes long time to develop, I think.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:53 pm
yes, it’s potentially cheezy (though it is suggested by the oak). This is a sort of line that sometimes takes long time to develop, I think.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:53 pm
yes, it’s potentially cheezy (though it is suggested by the oak). This is a sort of line that sometimes takes long time to develop, I think.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:53 pm
yes, it’s potentially cheezy (though it is suggested by the oak). This is a sort of line that sometimes takes long time to develop, I think.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:53 pm
yes, it’s potentially cheezy (though it is suggested by the oak). This is a sort of line that sometimes takes long time to develop, I think.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:50 pm
Thanks, and neither do I…but I’m not in an acorn kinda mood here, if you catch my drift…
August 11th, 2004 at 8:50 pm
Thanks, and neither do I…but I’m not in an acorn kinda mood here, if you catch my drift…
August 11th, 2004 at 8:50 pm
Thanks, and neither do I…but I’m not in an acorn kinda mood here, if you catch my drift…
August 11th, 2004 at 8:50 pm
Thanks, and neither do I…but I’m not in an acorn kinda mood here, if you catch my drift…
August 11th, 2004 at 8:50 pm
Thanks, and neither do I…but I’m not in an acorn kinda mood here, if you catch my drift…
August 11th, 2004 at 8:50 pm
Thanks, and neither do I…but I’m not in an acorn kinda mood here, if you catch my drift…
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
*breathless*
“Dream is one letter away from dread.”
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
*breathless*
“Dream is one letter away from dread.”
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
*breathless*
“Dream is one letter away from dread.”
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
*breathless*
“Dream is one letter away from dread.”
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
*breathless*
“Dream is one letter away from dread.”
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
*breathless*
“Dream is one letter away from dread.”
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
WOW!
BTW, I do not fully belief in the very last line. It would be better w/o it, or maybe with sth different instead (but I do not believe in “I am so small” etc. either). One thing that comes to my mind is a metaphor including an acorn.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
WOW!
BTW, I do not fully belief in the very last line. It would be better w/o it, or maybe with sth different instead (but I do not believe in “I am so small” etc. either). One thing that comes to my mind is a metaphor including an acorn.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
WOW!
BTW, I do not fully belief in the very last line. It would be better w/o it, or maybe with sth different instead (but I do not believe in “I am so small” etc. either). One thing that comes to my mind is a metaphor including an acorn.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
WOW!
BTW, I do not fully belief in the very last line. It would be better w/o it, or maybe with sth different instead (but I do not believe in “I am so small” etc. either). One thing that comes to my mind is a metaphor including an acorn.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
WOW!
BTW, I do not fully belief in the very last line. It would be better w/o it, or maybe with sth different instead (but I do not believe in “I am so small” etc. either). One thing that comes to my mind is a metaphor including an acorn.
August 11th, 2004 at 8:49 pm
WOW!
BTW, I do not fully belief in the very last line. It would be better w/o it, or maybe with sth different instead (but I do not believe in “I am so small” etc. either). One thing that comes to my mind is a metaphor including an acorn.