This shows up in just_jeff‘s comments for his assignment to write an unrhymed sonnet. Try it, if you haven’t!
FISH AND CHIPS
The smell of the place was with me before
I ever set eyes on it. “Ron’s Clam Shack,”
read the blistered sign; cars filled the cracked lot,
the line coiled around the yellow porchfront
and stopped under an old oak. I parked, joined
the crowd waiting for clam strips and bellies.
Then I saw you, with your toddler in tow,
walking back to the minivan as you
laughed and licked a softserve cone. Your husband
got out to kiss you. You never saw me.
You got in, you drove off. I closed my eyes:
they’d betrayed me again. I do better
when I don’t trust them. I followed my nose,
got fish and chips, and cried all the way home.
Dark Matter 
July 28th, 2004 at 8:41 am
Re: I agree
Hm. Hadn’t consciously seen that, but I do see it.
I love how syllabic counts can sometimes push stuff into poems that you didn’t intend.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:41 am
Re: I agree
Hm. Hadn’t consciously seen that, but I do see it.
I love how syllabic counts can sometimes push stuff into poems that you didn’t intend.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:41 am
Re: I agree
Hm. Hadn’t consciously seen that, but I do see it.
I love how syllabic counts can sometimes push stuff into poems that you didn’t intend.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:41 am
Re: I agree
Hm. Hadn’t consciously seen that, but I do see it.
I love how syllabic counts can sometimes push stuff into poems that you didn’t intend.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:41 am
Re: I agree
Hm. Hadn’t consciously seen that, but I do see it.
I love how syllabic counts can sometimes push stuff into poems that you didn’t intend.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:35 am
Re: I agree
I was thinking int a little more immediate. the phrase “with your toddler in tow” is a little bit more ambigous then if it were just “toddler in tow” and that rings a suspicious little chord of guilt or regret or desire, because it’s assigning possession.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:35 am
Re: I agree
I was thinking int a little more immediate. the phrase “with your toddler in tow” is a little bit more ambigous then if it were just “toddler in tow” and that rings a suspicious little chord of guilt or regret or desire, because it’s assigning possession.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:35 am
Re: I agree
I was thinking int a little more immediate. the phrase “with your toddler in tow” is a little bit more ambigous then if it were just “toddler in tow” and that rings a suspicious little chord of guilt or regret or desire, because it’s assigning possession.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:35 am
Re: I agree
I was thinking int a little more immediate. the phrase “with your toddler in tow” is a little bit more ambigous then if it were just “toddler in tow” and that rings a suspicious little chord of guilt or regret or desire, because it’s assigning possession.
July 28th, 2004 at 8:35 am
Re: I agree
I was thinking int a little more immediate. the phrase “with your toddler in tow” is a little bit more ambigous then if it were just “toddler in tow” and that rings a suspicious little chord of guilt or regret or desire, because it’s assigning possession.
July 28th, 2004 at 7:43 am
Re: dude
It resonates well with me.
July 28th, 2004 at 7:43 am
Re: dude
It resonates well with me.
July 28th, 2004 at 7:43 am
Re: dude
It resonates well with me.
July 28th, 2004 at 7:43 am
Re: dude
It resonates well with me.
July 28th, 2004 at 7:43 am
Re: dude
It resonates well with me.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:58 pm
Re: I like the juxtaposition…
Ronnie’s is — fragrant, to say the least.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:58 pm
Re: I like the juxtaposition…
Ronnie’s is — fragrant, to say the least.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:58 pm
Re: I like the juxtaposition…
Ronnie’s is — fragrant, to say the least.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:58 pm
Re: I like the juxtaposition…
Ronnie’s is — fragrant, to say the least.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:58 pm
Re: I like the juxtaposition…
Ronnie’s is — fragrant, to say the least.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: dude
Dude! Like, thanks ‘n’ all that.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: dude
Dude! Like, thanks ‘n’ all that.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: dude
Dude! Like, thanks ‘n’ all that.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: dude
Dude! Like, thanks ‘n’ all that.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: dude
Dude! Like, thanks ‘n’ all that.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: I agree
The eyes have it.
I was thinking of a situation where you see an old lover, happy in her new life, and you feel the sting of being forgotten.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: I agree
The eyes have it.
I was thinking of a situation where you see an old lover, happy in her new life, and you feel the sting of being forgotten.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: I agree
The eyes have it.
I was thinking of a situation where you see an old lover, happy in her new life, and you feel the sting of being forgotten.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: I agree
The eyes have it.
I was thinking of a situation where you see an old lover, happy in her new life, and you feel the sting of being forgotten.
July 27th, 2004 at 5:57 pm
Re: I agree
The eyes have it.
I was thinking of a situation where you see an old lover, happy in her new life, and you feel the sting of being forgotten.
July 27th, 2004 at 2:24 pm
I like the juxtaposition…
of the senses of sight and smell. Smell is so wound up in memory for me (as for most people, I believe), and I like the idea of relying on your nose more than your eyes.
July 27th, 2004 at 2:24 pm
I like the juxtaposition…
of the senses of sight and smell. Smell is so wound up in memory for me (as for most people, I believe), and I like the idea of relying on your nose more than your eyes.
July 27th, 2004 at 2:24 pm
I like the juxtaposition…
of the senses of sight and smell. Smell is so wound up in memory for me (as for most people, I believe), and I like the idea of relying on your nose more than your eyes.
July 27th, 2004 at 2:24 pm
I like the juxtaposition…
of the senses of sight and smell. Smell is so wound up in memory for me (as for most people, I believe), and I like the idea of relying on your nose more than your eyes.
July 27th, 2004 at 2:24 pm
I like the juxtaposition…
of the senses of sight and smell. Smell is so wound up in memory for me (as for most people, I believe), and I like the idea of relying on your nose more than your eyes.
July 27th, 2004 at 1:20 pm
dude
I love this poem
July 27th, 2004 at 1:20 pm
dude
I love this poem
July 27th, 2004 at 1:20 pm
dude
I love this poem
July 27th, 2004 at 1:20 pm
dude
I love this poem
July 27th, 2004 at 1:20 pm
dude
I love this poem
July 27th, 2004 at 1:10 pm
I agree
a great snapshot. I’m not quite sure what’s going on tho, forgive me
is the “they” that misled you you’re eyes? or the couple?
July 27th, 2004 at 1:10 pm
I agree
a great snapshot. I’m not quite sure what’s going on tho, forgive me
is the “they” that misled you you’re eyes? or the couple?
July 27th, 2004 at 1:10 pm
I agree
a great snapshot. I’m not quite sure what’s going on tho, forgive me
is the “they” that misled you you’re eyes? or the couple?
July 27th, 2004 at 1:10 pm
I agree
a great snapshot. I’m not quite sure what’s going on tho, forgive me
is the “they” that misled you you’re eyes? or the couple?
July 27th, 2004 at 1:10 pm
I agree
a great snapshot. I’m not quite sure what’s going on tho, forgive me
is the “they” that misled you you’re eyes? or the couple?