There’s a hole in me the size of a departing flight.
Something taxis up to the edge and takes off, flying out of me toward a horizon.
(It’s not that I can see any horizon; I just know that’s
what planes fly into. It used to be the wild blue yonder that planes
flew into, but no one thinks planes are that wild anymore — they seem to us
more like stale buses full of cranky people eating meals that don’t
fill them, much the same way that nothing fills me now.)
I keep thinking, even after my mind falls into the hole in me and disappears,
that I’m going to rise and follow that vapor trail into the blush,
catch up to the flight before the sun goes down;
you’d think I’d know better by now,
I ought to know better by now,
I ought to be able
to figure this one out.
Dark Matter 
July 12th, 2003 at 1:18 pm
Re: Line breaks
Lynne and I were discussing a poem I’m working on and it was interesting *to me* for her to point out where line breaks in the poem should be. It made what I thought was a pretty terrible poem into what I had intended on writing in the first place. I’ve since been working on using them more.
July 12th, 2003 at 4:42 am
J-hut, most likely. I’ve got another commitment tonight so I won’t make the Moonstruck.
Thanks, Star…
July 12th, 2003 at 4:39 am
Yeah! i miss your poems tony….i don’t get enough of them out this way…
(but i will be at the moonstruck and the j-hut this week, although i dunno if you will)
July 12th, 2003 at 4:25 am
Re: Line breaks
Thanks, Morris…
Y’know, I agree with you wholeheartedly; I think it’s almost a lost art. I use ’em very thoughtfully, in order to indicate breaths, flow, emphasis.
But then again, I think of the poem on page as a script for the performance, so that if someone wanted to cover the poem, they can see how it was meant to be heard (or rather, how I meant it to be heard).
Again, thank you…
July 11th, 2003 at 11:41 pm
Line breaks
A lot of poets, especially slam poets, don’t do shit with them.
Line breaks, I mean. It’s nice that you do. Striking.
Mmmhmm.
July 11th, 2003 at 9:20 pm
Re: thanks
Just playing with updating…writing directly in the field, seeing what I can come up with.
And that, of course, is the easy version of the story behind this one… 😉
Glad you like it.
July 11th, 2003 at 9:16 pm
Tony…
I don’t even know what to say. This is incredible.