August 31, 2004

2nd draft

By Tony Brown

And I can’t even take credit, because dead_kitty dropped superb editing on what I’d done and made it far better. Much more economical.

Hmmmmm…final_girl offered a new ending to one of my poems a week or so ago and it rocked. Maybe I’m better at starting poems these days than finishing them.

Never let it be said that I didn’t accept help from better poets when it was offered. I’m no idiot.

thank you, again…

😉

happy family

johnny dropped a penny. ellie
picked it up. saved a few
and bought johnny cigarettes. johnny
smoked them and didn’t speak to ellie
until he needed more.

johnny and ellie got married and
had kids. the kids rolled around
on the floor because
they were crazy anyway. they got pounded until
they fit the holes they fell into. everyday johnny

dropped a valentine in front of the kids
and they didn’t say anything
until they’d about chewed
each other’s arms off to get it.
then ellie asked them why they were such a mess.

and that is how it happens
that we find johnny and ellie smoking
and the kids cringing back
holding a valentine soaked in blood,
with pennies over their eyes.

About Tony Brown

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A poet with a history in slam, lots of publications; my personal poetry and a little bit of daily life and opinions. Read the page called "About..." for the details. View all posts by Tony Brown
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